unioctopegacorn's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Nami Swan]

I like it, but the anatomy is a bit off, the hips start at the bottom of the sides of the rib-cage, and her neck is a little long, but otherwise great job

http://img00.deviantart.net/1506/i/2015/340/2/c/female_body_study_by_tigrobobr-d9j7oyk.jpg

BadTyke responds:

Hey man thanks for the critique! I'll keep that in mind :)

[Moon Knight]

Pretty good sculpting work, I think you should look more into anatomy though. The pectorals are only made of three horizontal sections, and the top two abs almost look squished by the pectorals, they don't really compete with them for space. I like that you wanted to include the external obliques and serratus anterior, but you forgot the latissimus dorsi, which goes behind the serratus anterior and connect to the back of the deltoids. Also, look up the pattern of the serratus anterior and oblique muscles, it's a little complicated, but once you get it down, it makes muscular characters look much more defined, and a lot cooler in my opinion. Like I said, Great work

deafguitarist063 responds:

Ah yes that is true. I'm still learning to make accurate anatomy. Thanks for letting me know what i should work on. That clear my mind and push me to improve more on that area.

Thanks for the feedback :)

[Fine Ass]

the torso is decent for the most part. Her right arm is a bit screwy, her shoulder was put too far back, and her arm is too thin/ short. Her hand is also really small, for future reference, the hand (when the fingers are open) is slightly larger than the face, and (when the arm is at it's side) should be able to reach half-way down the thigh. Also, I get that it's more of an anime style, but her right eye should be closer to the center of her face. Consider using construction lines when creating the upper and lower torso so that you can better tell how they connect, I say this because you have a section between her rib-cage and hips that doesn't really exist, the hips more or less start at the bottom of the sides of the rib-cage, sometimes a bit higher. despite the few issues, you're definitely headed in the right direction!

https://66.media.tumblr.com/17ee247682b0086a4b3b0f58e72c420e/tumblr_mnphwa6E9M1s5f7mgo1_1280.jpg

http://img00.deviantart.net/1506/i/2015/340/2/c/female_body_study_by_tigrobobr-d9j7oyk.jpg

VaporNinja responds:

Thanks again!

[Birthday!]

I like the color palette, think about using colors other than just black for the line-work like a red-ish brown or some other color that fits into this spectrum, so that it compliments your already great colors. but otherwise, pretty simplistic, but very appealing.

Bbycheese responds:

thank you for the advice!

[Back from my Trip]

I like the face, it's very funny, and the line-work is smooth. It would be nice if you added values to the hair so that it isn't just black. Also, the back of his hand is perpendicular to the viewer, when it should be on the paper he's holding. I also think this type of cartoon could benefit from line-weight variation so that you can emphasize things like his expression, or his arm, which is closest to the viewer.

VaporNinja responds:

Thanks! I wasn't really trying with this picture. It was just a quick sketch I made just for that blog I posted on my instagram lol. But thanks anyways. It's kinda hard to make values for my hair just cuz it really is just a minature afro. I shortened it a bit in this drawing though.

[snow]

This would be pretty good if you changed around a few small things. You mostly only see rain when there is something bright highlights it, and snow when something dark is behind it, whatever these specks are they're very thin, long and blurry, so I can only assume it's rain, either way, by covering the entire piece in this rain effect, it looks really blurry. if you had a stronger point of light, you could add more details to the branches of the trees (thereby creating bright spots in the painting for you to show the rain). I also think it would look better if the ground was more varied; right now the ground is just a gradient, and the trees aren't really creating cast shadows on it. But if you made the sides of the road dirt or something, you would not only make it look more realistic, you'd also draw the viewer's attention to the center of the painting, at the end of the road (which could look very cool). Like I said, the changes would be very small, but it would really finalize an already good piece

Everratic responds:

This is a great review! I'll keep these points in mind when I make my next piece. I'll probably make a similar painting so I can try implementing your suggestions. Thank you.

[Batman and Superman]

I like the inking, not many people do it now, but you did a good job. the colors and the painting seem a bit lacking though, none of the colors go together in regards to color theory, you have a purple sky, bright yellow windows lime green water,bright green hands, a very nice set of blues on superman, but a very over saturated emblem on his chest, and then batman (who I'm assuming is the focal point of the drawing) is very washed out, with a very small range of grays (a gray batman is fine, but he needs more than light gray, and medium grey when shading him). you also made batman's and superman's skin tones yellow, which doesn't look very nice. There's also an issue with your background, it breaks any perspective in the drawing, the rows of windows on the buildings start going straight way above your horizon line, and overall they just aren't very well rendered for how bold the lines on them are. I think you'd be better off making the background with no inking so that we can focus on the foreground. One more thing, superman's left knee is farther away from the viewer, but you drew it lower than his right knee, and you're drawing his forearms as if they're disconnected from the upper arms, and just facing forward, if you looks up the anatomy of the forearm, they almost have rows of muscles that come from the sides of the upper arm. But all in all, I like it

hagarrastamnz responds:

thanks i really appreciate it you take the time to make that critique.
I'm going to keep in mind from now on.